As I read, I imagined that the bus was crowded, a little noisy. I think people were worrying about their place. The people weren't really happy. They were upset and feeling unfair, because they had to move to another place. Not a good place, but worse. The little children may thought it's fun, and they were going on an adventure. Unlike the adults, they knew where they were going, and they didn't want to go.
The place they were moving into was really dirty and small,... They were also afraid of the wire fences. They didn't feel freedom because of those fences;keep people from running away. It wasn't that much of a happy mood.
I think so too... I think the place where they were moving was dirty and small too, and so it made them felt uncomfortable. And it wasn't a happy mood at all...
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ReplyDeleteI'd agree with you. I think you'll have to add what the mood was after the journey, though. BUt overall, it's awesome (:
You are right, I totally agree with you. You can did it better if you try to add the mood after the journey. Still, It's great. :)
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